Need Some opinions/Critiqueing of music

[hulzsumraizens]

Hello,

I would like to ask for some comments/opinions/suggestions for the following demo song by my band.

here is the link: http://minorcrisis.net/files/Hulzsum Raizens- Old House.mp3

I believe it still works...if the link doesnt work please tell me.

thx

[xentull]

Uhm yea...
Some constructive criticm.
1: Don't freak out with that panneling, chorus, flanger or whatever it is that gets your voice to go from speaker to speaker, it's almost impossible to hear what you're singing plus it messes with my head.
2: Uhm..The melody...It was most of the time just some noise or something, although there was a little melody then don't put so much noise in it.
3: there's some places in the song where you sing or where the melody is out of tact..Work a bit on that..

Hope it helped...