Another song

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here is another song to rip apart......I know production values suck....would like a critique on composition and arrangement....anything else, do what you want....thanks in advance!!!!!!
http://soundclick.com/jaywilliams Old man Howard

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No takers?

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Sorry... im busy burning my fingers and watching the neighbors attempt to set the field across the street on fire. Aint July 4th grand?!? ;) :D

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bump...................